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Kathy

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« on: July 18, 2011, 03:00:11 pm »
Hi all -

Phillip's post got me thinking and inspired - an amazing feat  ;D - so I'm issuing a challenge to you all -

I have written the first verse and the chorus for a song that tells the story of a young sailor, his lady, and his love.  I also have a melody in mind, that is rather plaintive.  Here is my challenge - add to the song - compose a verse of 4 rhyming lines, furthering the story along - once we have finished it, I'll finish the score and then post it here - I bet we can tell a great story!

Here are the 1st verse and chorus to get us started:

My Lady, My Love

Oh my love, don't you see,
she's left something in me,
she won't let it be,
and I don't think I'll ever be free.

(Chorus)
And away we go, on the next flowing tide,
to far away lands and new shores we glide.
My lady is jealous and she'll not let me bide,
here at home, my love, by your side.

Enjoy!

Kathy
 
PS:  AS ALWAYS, PLEASE FEEL FREE TO POST SOMETHING OF YOUR OWN! (I simply started this because I think it would be fun to compose something together  ;D)

« Last Edit: July 18, 2011, 04:01:46 pm by wendolk »

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Re: Challenge
« Reply #1 on: July 18, 2011, 04:37:41 pm »
Oh my love, wide and deep,
I know she makes you weep,
But shush, not a peep,
As away into the night I creep.

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Re: Challenge
« Reply #2 on: July 18, 2011, 05:30:02 pm »
 :'( :'( :'( This is so tragic.

Though you beg me to stay
By night and by day
She calls me away
To the salt and the wind and the spray

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Re: Challenge
« Reply #3 on: July 19, 2011, 11:05:26 pm »
well ladies, it looks like no one else is going to chime in (  ;D ) , so, here is our final verse -


Sweet kisses you gave
it's your love that I crave
it's my soul that you save
from the wind and the sky and the wave.

OK - if you both like this, I'll set the verses and chorus to music and figure out some way to get it to you -

Kathy


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Re: Challenge
« Reply #4 on: July 21, 2011, 07:52:27 am »
I expect to see you singing it on YouTube very soon Kathy. 

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« Reply #5 on: July 21, 2011, 05:01:17 pm »
Some of us yearned to chime, but alas, (competent) poetry may not be within our talents.